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MrSteepPockets

MrSteepPockets

Sicc OG
#7
Oct 16, 2006
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#7
nice constructive feedback... jackasses

Beat = good
Lyrical content = good
flow / beat riding = O.K. / good
"singing voices" = NOT SO GOOD

I'm not sure what it would be called but id work on you're "voices". Lyrics and rhymes seem to be pretty good but just how you say the lyrics. not how fast or how you ride the beat but how you say the words. I guess the best way to put it would be that, your lyrics don't sound pleasant to the ear. I know you guys probably want a sinister style delivery on this song which is definatly good but try to make your delivery smoother. Listen to rappers like Tech N9ne and listen to how his delievery is so smooth and effortless. overall id say your rap skills are GOOD but your "Singing" skills are lacking, work more on your delivery so people arnt turned off by it, or even better so people will like your delivery and wont care what u rap about (mainstream rap is all about delivery and not so much about content).

Right now i would put you guys up there with ICP. Decent lyrics and beat riding but most people would call them talentless hacks because thier delivery is so hard on the ears.

Seriously, mb look into having some sort of music or singing teacher try to give you some advise into improvng your delivery. If your serious about it why not?

Smooth think smooth... right your your delivery is rough and skreachy smooth that shit out. Keep your same style and shit just smooth it out so it glides through the ears effortlessly.

You guys put alot of effort in, i can tell. If you smooth your delivery(ies) out and get some one else to sing the hooks, youd be VERY GOOD.

I hope this helps, there is probably alot of errors and repetition or just poor english in general. I really dont give a fuck because i just smoked a bowl of some good weed and am also amped up on amphetamines.

PEACE!!!

**STEEP POCKETS OUT--



EDIT: workin on second bowl now :)
 
sobman

sobman

Knight
#9
Jan 17, 2007
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#9
ya, i don't like the fat mother fucker in the background going "YEA" "BITCH" "Whore" that shits gay

the acc needs to be lowered some so the beat's louder
 
Amerikilla

Amerikilla

Sicc OG
#11
Dec 10, 2005
483
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#11
MrSteepPockets said:
nice constructive feedback... jackasses

Beat = good
Lyrical content = good
flow / beat riding = O.K. / good
"singing voices" = NOT SO GOOD

I'm not sure what it would be called but id work on you're "voices". Lyrics and rhymes seem to be pretty good but just how you say the lyrics. not how fast or how you ride the beat but how you say the words. I guess the best way to put it would be that, your lyrics don't sound pleasant to the ear. I know you guys probably want a sinister style delivery on this song which is definatly good but try to make your delivery smoother. Listen to rappers like Tech N9ne and listen to how his delievery is so smooth and effortless. overall id say your rap skills are GOOD but your "Singing" skills are lacking, work more on your delivery so people arnt turned off by it, or even better so people will like your delivery and wont care what u rap about (mainstream rap is all about delivery and not so much about content).

Right now i would put you guys up there with ICP. Decent lyrics and beat riding but most people would call them talentless hacks because thier delivery is so hard on the ears.

Seriously, mb look into having some sort of music or singing teacher try to give you some advise into improvng your delivery. If your serious about it why not?

Smooth think smooth... right your your delivery is rough and skreachy smooth that shit out. Keep your same style and shit just smooth it out so it glides through the ears effortlessly.

You guys put alot of effort in, i can tell. If you smooth your delivery(ies) out and get some one else to sing the hooks, youd be VERY GOOD.

I hope this helps, there is probably alot of errors and repetition or just poor english in general. I really dont give a fuck because i just smoked a bowl of some good weed and am also amped up on amphetamines.

PEACE!!!

**STEEP POCKETS OUT--



EDIT: workin on second bowl now :)
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yeah, SteepPocket's is right...its all about the "smooth", think Bone.

so yeah...go head and pass that bowl this way yo.
 
Big E

Big E

Sicc OG
#14
Nov 10, 2004
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#14
I posted it in there and got no feedback so I posted it in here cuz I always get Feedback. Come on, it's the first time in a year or so I posted a song in here so who the hell cares? I'm gonna tell ya like I have told yall before, if you don't like it fine, tell me you don't, if you u do, cool, tell me about it, but don't tell me that I can't post in here.
 
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mizzouplaya

Sicc OG
#16
Oct 9, 2002
3,172
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#16
Big E said:
I posted it in there and got no feedback so I posted it in here cuz I always get Feedback. Come on, it's the first time in a year or so I posted a song in here so who the hell cares?
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There was a reason you got no feedback there... no one cares to give you the time of day... say thing goes in this forum. The only feedback you ever get in here is people tellin you to get the fuck out... yet you still come back..

and first time in a year??? Fuck here are a few since the beginning of the year i found quickly

http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=241632
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=239634
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=238060
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=236894
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=231837
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=225417
http://www.siccness.net/vb/showthread.php?t=206465

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