I dunno Im in no way shape or form an artist but I think you could of done this song more aggressively with a faster beat and benefited because like you said stop sleepin, but by the end of the song i was liteweight depressed and sleepy, so thats all I mean with something more uptempo, i think your in tough spot musically because I think most people listen to music to kinda escape from the bullshit your talkin about so if thats gonna be your line then I think you gotta get on Hiero's level lyrically to keep peoples attention because most socially conscious rap doesnt slap in the trunk