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transparent_lfe

Sicc OG
#1
Jan 24, 2006
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whats up..just another nobody trying to see if cats like my sound...so download it...and let me know....and for the hell of it...i'll post the lyrics...so shit makes more sense..it's just a song me a a homeboy was gunna do...but he never did his part...so..it's just me..and like a minfifteen or twenty..and it's over the...Shit hits the fan beat..

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=486081

blind folded with masks,
rip it in half,
ripin a rap with writtin attacks
because we rippin an ass in this game
gotta relax just a little bit
before i pull out the axe and start slashing away

and kill it
now is he talking literally
this beat you feelin will beat your feelings
till there's no more feelings phsically
but mentally scared
dealing this damage got you zipped up with a straight jacket tied with arms

so now you struggle
tossing and turnning while dreams burrning
yearning with desire but brain's no longer churning
no longer stirring up the plots to get across,
the blocked thoughts Transparent's the one the one on cross

so pray to this i'm on Jesus' curcifix
you pray to him, he comes to me when he's in a fix
so bow down, flames commin from this cow town
bloaw bloaw Flint and Sac the fires on now

give it gotta be livid, to live it,
furious state of minds got you feeling a little timid
so back away
feelin dumber than nick Lachey's wifey
now your minds so fucked up, your nick name is now hyphie
 
shep

shep

Sicc OG
#2
Oct 2, 2002
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does this look like American Idol to you? post this shit in general hip hop or open discussion or some shit.
 
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nonlinear

Sicc OG
#4
Feb 8, 2006
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I'm not a rapper and I'm not a critic, but...

1. Get some emotion.
2. Change up styles or add some gimics.
3. Get a hook.
4. Get a studio.

The writing is pretty good and you have some potential, but you sound bored.
 
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DEVIL'S POET

Sicc OG
#9
Mar 7, 2004
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ive been around since the siccness just started and all i use to do is search the fourms and read some of the bullshit everyone had to talk about and search for more underground music. but now i like to voice my opinon. but i see how alot of this shit gets clusterd with diff posts everywhere. but yeah i wanst to interested with ur shit dude but allways keep doing what you love.
 
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