peep my shit and tell me what you think(20 bars)

[C-Style]

Lyrical Murda, wit rap in my state of mind/
it's that ill flowin assassin cookin up intisive rhymes/
creatin a motion picture sound track for the 209/
with mind bogglin lines that take you on a trip through time/
so sit back and listen while i spit this venemous heat/
releasin havoc filled stories that keep you on the edge of your seat/
with these adults tellin me i'n finna turn into a dead beat/
but showed em up in the game wit skill raw like red meat/
smokin them tight emcees on the corners of 23rd street/
protectin my fuckin clique on that 1400 block/
set foot, you'll get blown away with a hollow from the glock/
and the bullets hittin you so hard its causin hydro shock/
but outta the dopest lyricists yo i'm the illest/
them bitch ass haters pointin guns at my crew tryin to kill us/
we retaliatin , spittin bullets makin em die hard like Bruce Willis/
everybody from the hood to the burbs is gone feel this/
cause with these masterpeice lyrics i cause drama/
controversial rhymes that'll offend you and yo bitch momma/
left dissed and dismissed when i drop this shit upon ya/
feelin the heat and start to sweat like you was up in a sauna/

hit me wit some feedback

 

[C-Style]

uppin

 

[C-Style]

anyone?

 

[KODOGG]

Tight shit jus' work on developing a bigger vocab.. 'n some multi's.. 'n that shit be bangin'.

 

[FaT j]

so sit back and listen while i spit this venemous heat/
releasin havoc filled stories that keep you on the edge of your seat/
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I LIKED THAT ONE BUT YEA JUS DO WUT KODOGG TOLD AND U HOPEFULLY OTHER PPL WELL REPLY AND TELL U ANYTHING ELSE BUT JUS MEMBER ALL THIS SHIT ONLY HELPS THAT THEY SAY.......I FINALLY LEARNED THAT

 

[C-Style]

thanks

 

[Greg Double]

yeah dogg, shit was cool, im knowin on the short bars, you got good word usage, good flow.. u should drop that as audio.. paece! out

 

[C-Style]

thanks, i'm gonna record it in a day or 2