juss some shit.. life

[MrDontGIVEaFUCK]

Damn i'm trying to find myself, it must be a game//
Never can get away for i’m always busted or framed//
Enter the passion of death, Its something i might fear//
Dreams get broken like glass, turns into a nightmare//
Soon to being dead, ahead of me is visons of graveyards//
I’ve failed at times, but lived a savage life as a braveheart//
The chart-straight-low, heart-rate-slow, feel my minutes ending//
Grave already made, space opened, the divots extending//


part of a verse....

aint finished


but feedback is my objective


MISTAH MVP

 

[KODOGG]

Nice shit.. Im feelin' it almost exactly.. Jus' needs ta be a bit longer and it's a solid verse.

 

[MrDontGIVEaFUCK]

why should it be longer when it fit's on the beat?....


fuck Quality... get yah point across...

 

[KODOGG]

Yea well i didnt know that mayne.. if it fitz da beat.. spit that shit raw..

 

[SlangsumLangsam]

ok imma be strait up, i felt the rhymes most definetly, meaning the story line, but it was a little to simple, cept tha last 2 bars

and 2 a beat it mite sound bette also, so when u get that recorded lemme peep it

peaaaace

 

[Greg Double]

ay shits coo man.. id like to see the completed verse