check out my homeboy's song, ( FREE DOWNLOAD! )

[hyphyflip]

check out my homeboys song.
he did the beat and was the one who rapped on the song too
so i need your guys HONEST OPINION..
on the beat
and the whole song etc..
it doesnt matter if u think its wack or whatever
just wanna know ur guys opinion on it
if u want some other songs by him pM me

here's the link
http://download.yousendit.com/6E411B59298EBA56

tnx!

 

[hyphyflip]

Ooh yea his name's Ed rice
song's name is "It's Official"

 

[Defy]

the beat had alot of elements, but I wasn't feelin the sounds. Did he use reason or something like that? and I really wasn't feeling the hook. I couldn't hear his lyrics really cuz I got laptop speakers, but the whole sound of the song felt like it was made (or should've been made) in the early 90s

 

[FILA|AUS]

Umm....this is kind of hit and miss....

The BEAT sounds kinds dope, or it would if he put the right sounds to use, it is desigend well just the base & drums dont hit.

He's not that great rapper at the moment. and I say at the moment coz he could always improve. He's not terrible.

Depends on how long he's been making music, if this is his first attempt, then its excellent.

 

[Tha Sinner]

how come nobody ever check out my tracks?....if u want to, follow the link on my sig....

 

[FILA|AUS]

Stilletos flows sounds good.

 

[Tha Sinner]

^^^^^^YAY!!!!....i really appreciate that mayne

 

[510miguel]

its kool i like it

 

[Defy]

and also, try streaming next time you want to get feedback, asking people to download is a bit much

 

[Defy]

how come nobody ever check out my tracks?....if u want to, follow the link on my sig....

on stilletoes, dood has hella lyrics, he just needs to work on his flow a bit to make it sound more fluid. it sounded like he took hella time into writing the rap, but just read the shit off the paper instead of putting life into it. and find a new name, cuz "thoed yung playaz" ain't cutting it. from reading the bio, y'all are hella young tho, so y'all got time to develop. with better recording equiptment, some original beats, & some work on delivery, y'all could really do something

 

[hyphyflip]

dude's been rappin for about 5 years now grew up to that mob muzic frisco sound around mid 90s , so that was his influence..
and how do u do streaming music?
oh yea appreciate everybodys commentz

 

[Tha Sinner]

on stilletoes, dood has hella lyrics, he just needs to work on his flow a bit to make it sound more fluid. it sounded like he took hella time into writing the rap, but just read the shit off the paper instead of putting life into it. and find a new name, cuz "thoed yung playaz" ain't cutting it. from reading the bio, y'all are hella young tho, so y'all got time to develop. with better recording equiptment, some original beats, & some work on delivery, y'all could really do something

i appreciate that mayne........i feel ya though...all my lyrics come like that....i work hard to make my flows lyrical and full of metaphors.....if you want a copy of the album holla at me.....thanks fa the feedback

 

[Defy]

dude's been rappin for about 5 years now grew up to that mob muzic frisco sound around mid 90s , so that was his influence..
and how do u do streaming music?
oh yea appreciate everybodys commentz

like myspace or soundclick....you upload your song onto there and they'll play it without people downloading it, it just plays automatically...I dunno, I can't explain it....

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Streaming_audio

 

[Defy]

i appreciate that mayne........i feel ya though...all my lyrics come like that....i work hard to make my flows lyrical and full of metaphors.....if you want a copy of the album holla at me.....thanks fa the feedback

thats you? good shit....you need to play with your shit a little tho. change your vocal pitch, or do something different with your double-ups, or something. it just seems like you're reading off paper. I'd like to hear more tho.

 

[Tha Sinner]

i will up our whole new cd tomorrow for everyone......look out!

new track added on the myspace page........check out these lyrics:

well, its the damn sinner, im the shit like X-LAC
roll STRETCH LACS......gots to WRECK TRACKS//
fly as JET PACKS on a damn SPACE SUIT
sippin GREY GOOSE.......make 'em SAY "OOH"//
gotta STAY TRUE till my very LAST DAY
whole DASH GRAY....like a ASH TRAY//
tryin ta STACK PAY mo TALLER THAN A TOWER
BALLIN WIT THE POWER, CRAWLIN IN A CRAWLER//
CALL ME IN A HOUR, 'cause now im TIRED UP
killa FIRED UP.....while i RIDE BUCK//
got FIGHT CLUB fallin off tha FLAT SCREENS
back 2 BACK GS.....u know what THAT MEANS//
dont FLAP WINGS, but im still SO FLY
stack my DOUGH HIGH.....Sinner DONT LIE//
got the 4-5 if you tryin ta TAKE MY PAY
stay BAKIN HAY....gotta MAKE 'EM SAY (yuh)//

thats part of the track im workin on....its supposed to say (yuh) in every lil pause bold= rhymes.........underlined = metaphors

 

[Defy]

those are similies not metaphors, but yeah.....I think your rhyme scheme is dope, but your similies are just alright. there's nothing that would make me stop and say "oooooh, damn he said that!" work on your punchlines....the "yuh" would hella work tho

 

[Tha Sinner]

those are similies not metaphors, but yeah.....I think your rhyme scheme is dope, but your similies are just alright. there's nothing that would make me stop and say "oooooh, damn he said that!" work on your punchlines....the "yuh" would hella work tho

thats because u aint hear my album..but i swear i got sum good punchlines