you got some hard shadows, not really a good background - you shouldve just done it in front of a white wall, red eye - maybe some mad retouching and it can maybe be used for a mixtape
this inspires me to post the photoshoot i did with Haji Springer. They are polaroids so i have to scan them and then photoshop the Mcdonalds' out of the background but theyre coming and dont try to use them to make album covers!