My Soul (Please Give Feedback)

[Deu2e Wilde]

[Chorus]
This my soul...take it for what its worth,
as long as I'm on this earth, I'll live this shit for better or for worse/
don't judge a book by its cover but by the pages and how i use it/
my heart and my soul comin out in my music/

[Verse 1]
I'm usin' every lifeline, I put my life on the line/
Never put out a flat line yet no flow sicker than mine/
I hear every aspect of beats, I dissect every line/
The feeling of everything, I break down every rhyme/
The meaning of each word, the flow of each verse/
which verse should go last, and which should come first/
Rap is forever in my heart, even when shit gets worse/
as you can see it's part of me till I am part of this earth/
Rappin to me is a necessity like H-2-O/
Some only in it for tha dough but I'm in it to let go/
yeah money's nice but nothing can surpass the high I know/
No experience can top, or even touch my flow/
When I'm concocting my songs, I hold total control/
I'm doing everything I can, to achieve my goal/
it ain't just a part of me, but my life as a whole/
the devil can take my life...but he can never take my soul/

[Chorus]

all i've written so far, Feedback please!!!!!

 

[Camby Savelle]

I thought you were gonna write some deep shit. but this is what is wrong with rap. empty meaningless shit. you rapping about rap homie, that's boring as fuck.

 

[Deu2e Wilde]

do you even understand the message...??

 

[Camby Savelle]

do you even want honest feedback? or are you just looking for people to say "oh that's tight"?

your message is that music is your soul, my message is that you need to find a new meaning.

 

[Deu2e Wilde]

well than what do you recommend i write about in that song then..??

 

[Deu2e Wilde]

uppin

 

[umbravo]

shit like this


inside my body is the soul of a psycho/
warrior destroying enemies like reiko/
mic flow is a hobby of mine/
then harold jumps the barrel and i'm pullin double time/
i'm scitzophrenic manic in a panic/
alter ego's got my shit going stright out of planning/
it's get deeper I try to dig up out the hole/
but my body lost control god please give me back my soul

stuff like that

 

[mrmafioso04]

@ Deu2e - a ur shit aint bad man that shit flow. just haters on here trying to talk bad.

 

[Deu2e Wilde]

thanks man, but i can see what umbravo is sayin a little

 

[Da Bay]

Damn nigga your chorus sounded like uz was gonna preach some gospel.