startin...help me out

[LiLPsychO]

i try to be happy but it just dont work ,always pissed off some people might think im a jerk/
u just dont know me so dont judge me at first, cause if u do u might have to experience the worst/
i get mad at the smallest ass things, if u dont respect whut i do i'll put yo necc in a sling/
people not known me try to fucc wit my mind, ways to bring me down is whut all these bitches find/
i just wanna live in peace but thats not how im treated, so i gotta bust bacc so my life dont get defeated/

late

whutup tell me whut u think er whut i could do better ..thanks

 

[Mic B]

it was alright, uve done better than that. you need more word play then that and u only ryme like 2 lines then start over try to go longer. but theres some help what ya asked fo. 1

 

[MrDontGIVEaFUCK]

use smilies.... those catch people!!! expand vocab and word play..... keep at it and keep posting stay up dawg.....