looks alot better than the first one. Id defintally take away some of those sparkles, just one or two sparkles makes it look alot more shiny then a shitload of sparkles if you over do them it just looks fake.....like dude said there shouldnt be sparkles in the shadows, the lightest parts of the logo is where the sparkles should be............. I think it be a bad choice to keep this as your final, if you go back and make those MINOR adjustments itll make it look a whole lot better.
edit: you should look into some graphic design classes, from what i understand your a kid so you should have all summer free to take some classes on graphic design....cause obviously your into graphic design and thats somethin you wanna do but i notice in almost all your work your missin alot of basic fundementals that a graphic designer should know about, the whole light source thing is a perfect example.