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I assume this is for freestylin' n shit....so check it out, I wrote this at DPGRecordz, plz rate it yall

There's some people in this world like you who think they know it all/
They think they know the real truth, and this will be your downfall/
Your whole life's upside down, that's why you talk shit/
First get it the right way round, and then you can spit/
you say I ain't goin' ta Heaven, cuz I comitted 6 of tha 7/
Of tha deadly sins, but maybe tha head G wins/
If u a murdera, maybe there's hope fa ya/
You could still go to tha Utopia/
Who says the evil ones don't go to paradise?/
And the good ones don't go to hell when they dies?/
Becuz life isn't fair, who says the afterlife is?/
Our world of despair, so fuccin harsh, 'n strife lives/
The whole world's full of misery and hatin'/
So maybe it's really controlled by Satan/
Maybe bad guys finish first/
And good guys finish worst/
Nobody knows what happens when we die/
And even worse, nobody even knows why/
So we're runnin' blind on this Earth/
After death do we get what we deserve?/
But maybe death ain't as evil as birth/
Bringin' a child into this world requirez some nerve/
A world of murder, rape, racism, and disease/
It seems all this hate won't ever slow down or cease/
And all you care about iz callin people "Fake G's"?/
In the long term it doesn't matter, check ur priorities/
You try to ignore all the problems going on/
And you just snore, not caring about all this wrong/
The best you can do,/
Is go to see a priest, repent your sins and get his blessings/
And hope it saves you,/
Not until you die will you get the answers to all the questions
 
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It was aight but there were alot of weak one syllable rhymes. (ex. shit & spit, die & why, first & worst, etc.) It probably sounds good when you spit it though. Keep at it playa...
 
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"The whole world's full of misery and hatin'/
So maybe it's really controlled by Satan/ "

good shit man.. keep writing and flowin and you'll up your game in no time.
 

Steve

Sicc OG
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Thanks homies...Ir eally apreciate the feedbacc...I'll post some of my other flows in here soon (Like Lyrical 187 or Racism)
all luv