video of verse i recorded for fun

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italianstallion

italianstallion

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i was just testing out my new mic and mbox, i made a new beat and rapped an old verse i wrote for a song called night owls, i still gotta learn more about mastering the vocals, but let me know what you think....

 
Criminalogical

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Your pronociation on the track is somewhat poor, your seperation and delivery could use work. Some of your lyrics had me scratching my head, and I couldnt make out most of what you said one a single play, especially towards the end. You have a tendency to not pause when needed, and you still have some ways to go.

Practice for many years, and if its truly your passion you will pick it up, but I would practice your delivery and tone...Speak up, enunciate...your words need to be crisp and sharp...what i heard was one Long sentence or two....See what I'm saying?

The beat wasnt the best Ive heard and somewhat began to interfere with you vocals at one point, I didnt see or get any plot or subject to the song, and you were rhyming..but its not quite rap.

but one things matters?...Did you have fun doin it and did you get a feel of whats its like to produce your own music?...Over time, with dedication and practice, you could be your favorite rappers favorite rapper in a few years.

Do it for the music....
 
italianstallion

italianstallion

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Criminalogical said:
Your pronociation on the track is somewhat poor, your seperation and delivery could use work. Some of your lyrics had me scratching my head, and I couldnt make out most of what you said one a single play, especially towards the end. You have a tendency to not pause when needed, and you still have some ways to go.

Practice for many years, and if its truly your passion you will pick it up, but I would practice your delivery and tone...Speak up, enunciate...your words need to be crisp and sharp...what i heard was one Long sentence or two....See what I'm saying?

The beat wasnt the best Ive heard and somewhat began to interfere with you vocals at one point, I didnt see or get any plot or subject to the song, and you were rhyming..but its not quite rap.

but one things matters?...Did you have fun doin it and did you get a feel of whats its like to produce your own music?...Over time, with dedication and practice, you could be your favorite rappers favorite rapper in a few years.

Do it for the music....
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thanks man, yeah i had fun, i wasnt really trying to make a hit song or anything, more like just trying to record something quick to test my mic out, i made that whole thing in 1 hour hahahaha
 
Criminalogical

Criminalogical

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italianstallion said:
thanks to everyone who listened, if you liked it, awesome, if you didnt like it, thats cool too
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You definitely have the right attitude for music, Accepting criticism is difficult when the reviews aren't in your favor. Keeping an open ear to the opinions of others and it will assist you throughout your hobby or career.

Best of luck to you and keep us posted on your progress, I'll be glad to peep out any future work of your and offer advice.
 
italianstallion

italianstallion

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Criminalogical said:
You definitely have the right attitude for music, Accepting criticism is difficult when the reviews aren't in your favor. Keeping an open ear to the opinions of others and it will assist you throughout your hobby or career.

Best of luck to you and keep us posted on your progress, I'll be glad to peep out any future work of your and offer advice.
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thanks man, im gonna do this music regardless, because no matter what anyone puts out, the way it will be percieved will be subjective. like personally i think ice cube is the best rapper ever, and many people agree with that, but other people think he sucks, and then theres people who dont even like rap at all, so no matter what some will love it some will hate it, but i definatly have a good time whenever i make music, so even if people dont like it i still get satisfaction
 
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