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CHRISHOGGALYPSE

CHRISHOGGALYPSE

Anti-Sicc OG
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Jul 21, 2002
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FORGIVE ME EAST CO CO FOR POSTING THIS HERE, BUT......LET ME KNOW WHAT Y'ALL THINK OF THIS ONE, I JUST WROTE IT. IT'S NOT REAL NEGATIVE OR ANYTHING, NO CURSES IN IT, READ THE WHOLE THING BEFORE YOU HATE ON IT, LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU DID OR DIDN'T LIKE, THERE ARE SOME GOOD LINES IN THERE.

IS MY LIFE WORTH LIVING?
I NEED A SECOND LOOK,
I NEED A GRIP OF MOTIVATION,
FROM MY FAVORITE BOOK/
NO PAWN OR ROOK,
CAN CROOK MY LIFE FROM THIS GAME,
ONLY KING JESUS CHRIST
CAN MAKE MY SOUL RE-LOCATE/

I'M TRYNA SHAKE,
THE ONE'S WHO HATE,
AND WANNA BREAK MY NECK,
LIKE A CORVETTE BEHIND A CAR WRECK/
I GET RESPECT,
BUT PROTECT AND SERVE IS A JOKE,
AND THESE BABY PITTS WITH NO STRIPES,
OUT HERE GUNNIN FOR MY THROAT/

I ROLL ALONE,
BUT BLUE TONES OF CLOTHES
IS QUICK TO SHOW,
IT AIN'T ALL GOOD
AND THEY PACKIN HEAT LIKE A CAR HOOD/
THE SHOOTING STARTED,
MY SOUL HAS PARTED FROM MY SKIN,
I PRAY TO WIN,
LORD PLEASE LET MY HEART BEAT AGAIN!/

MY GUARDIAN,
HAS PARDONED SIN,
I START TO GRIN,
WHEN MY BULLET MARKS ARE GONE,
IT'S ALL DARK AGAIN/
I GUESS I LOVE MY LIFE,
I GOT MY SECOND LOOK SO IT SEEMS,
BUT I GOT MY FIRST LOOK AT DEATH,
IT HAPPENED ALL IN MY DREAMS, YOU FOLLOW ME?
 
Chevy Man

Chevy Man

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NAW IT AINT THA WEAKED OR THA BEST..THATS WHY I SAID "I DONT KNOW WHAT TO SAY" HAHAA...WHAT BEAT FROM LIL FLIP WAS IT THOUGH?? MAYBE I CAN PULL OUT AN ACTUAL OPINION IF I HAD THA BEAT ROLLIN WHILE I READ IT
 
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Big Teflon

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Jun 14, 2002
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I LIKE IT.I THINK PEOPLE WILL HATE ON IT THO'.MAYBE BECUASE I AM REAL DEEP INTO MUSIC I LOOK DEEP INTO LYRICS TO TRY TO SEE WHAT PEOPLE ARE SAYIN' BECUASE USUALLY LYRICS ARE DEEPER THAN WHAT THEY APPEAR.I THINK EVERYTHANG FLOWS NICE TOGETHER.GOOD SHIT CHRIS.
 
CHRISHOGGALYPSE

CHRISHOGGALYPSE

Anti-Sicc OG
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thanks teflon. i always try to put a little more in there for the ones listening or reading in this case. i wanted the syllables to match up well on this one, and i threw some similies and meatphors in this one again. i think my favorite is "packin heat like a car hood."
 
RIX

RIX

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yea u hated on my shit hella bad, but i aint even gon hate on you, that shit aint weak, but it aint dope either, its juss yo thoughts on a peice of paper... but its coo tho, i tried to understand tha message u were sayin, but i dunno you, and i dunno what u into, so i really couldnt put together tha message u were tryin to portray, but aye, u gave it a shot... try throwin that on a beat, n flow it n see how u like it, i got a question for u tho... what made u right it to tha lil flip joint?
 
CHRISHOGGALYPSE

CHRISHOGGALYPSE

Anti-Sicc OG
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Jul 21, 2002
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cause that beat is hella smooth, i wanted to do somethin slower so people could catch what i was saying. i have noticed that people have a short attention span for lyrics, they just like the hook and the beat, eventually they hear all the words, and the eventually hear all the similies and shit. i want people to get what i say the first time, so they are hooked on the skills you know?
 
RIX

RIX

Sicc OG
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Dec 6, 2002
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ah yea, i feel, im listenin to tha beat right now as i type this, its hella fuckin smooth, aye, u kno any mo beats like this...?

if u feelin beats like that, try these...
richie rich- do g's go to heaven
luniz- makin moves
lil wayne- everything

those are similar try em out...
 
miggidy

miggidy

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Yo Chris,

That's surprisingly good.
I was thinking of writing a song very similar to this.

In a world where everyone raps about killin or pimpin, it's nice to spit about somethin different.
Something honest....
 
CHRISHOGGALYPSE

CHRISHOGGALYPSE

Anti-Sicc OG
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Jul 21, 2002
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miggidy said:
Yo Chris,

That's surprisingly good.
I was thinking of writing a song very similar to this.

In a world where everyone raps about killin or pimpin, it's nice to spit about somethin different.
Something honest....
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yeah, i wanted to switch it up. i ain't everybody else, so all i can do is me. i want to do stuff that a church kid could listen to, but still have some good beats and some realism to it instead of dc talk. that's why i put no curses in it. thanks for the dap on that
 
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